Today we are live-blogging and and looking at your thesis statements again. Your task is divided into two stages:
1: After you log in, type your thesis statement in to the comments section, just as you did before.
2. Constructively comment on someone else's thesis statement, using only that person's display name. Try to include a positive, as well as a recommendation.
Sunday, October 23, 2011
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When people are in crowds, they can lose their sense of identity and behave in ways that are against their better judgement
ReplyDeleteIn the episode of the Twilight Zone, "The Monsters are Due on Maple Street," people have a tendency to find a scapegoat when things go wrong while in a crowd.
ReplyDeleteThe behavior exhibited by the residents of Maple Street suggests that people in a crowd act differently than they would as individuals. The minds of those in a group merge to form a way of thinking, thus increasing enthusiasm, which ultimately leads to a loss of rationality.
ReplyDeleteOnce an individual joins a crowd, their behavior will change to conform to the overall mood and behavior of that crowd, and they may say or do things that they would not normally do or say.
ReplyDeleteWhen a person is in a crowd they don't think about their opinion they think about what others think about what they have to say.
ReplyDeleteBeing in a crowd changes the way people behave by making them less confident in their own ideas and more easily lead by others' ideas.
ReplyDeleteThe Twilight Zone episode "The Monsters Are Due on Maple Street" is an excellent example of how people in a group will behave differently and turn on each other as soon as an extraordinary event occurs; causing chaos.
ReplyDeleteIn times of hysteria, individuals collectively need someone or something to blame to reunite the majority of the distraught population. Three examples in which this phenomenon occurs is the Twilight Zone episode "The Monsters Are Due on Maple Street," the Japanese-American internment camps, and when someone releases flatulence.
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ReplyDeleteBeing in a crowd changes the way people behave because they do not think for themselves and they act upon others actions.
ReplyDeleteThe allegories shown in "The Monsters Are Due on Maple Street" criticize human nature as the Americans concede to peer pressure, assumptions, and gullibility.
ReplyDeleteZoe, a comma could be placed after "When a person is in a crowd", and a period or semi-colon could be used after "they don't think about their opinion."
ReplyDeleteIn the allegorical short film "The Monsters Are Due on Maple Street", the distrust of neighbors towards one another in the coming of the monsters ultimately disembodies their entire community.
ReplyDelete@blue77: I think that this is very good. You have support for your statement and you answered the question fully.
ReplyDeleteBeing in crowd can affect they way people behave, this is shown through their aggressiveness, their inability to think rationally, and the affect others have on them.
ReplyDeleteAn individual's behavior changes considerably when there is more people around him, because if something is perpetrated, he has the opportunity to put the blame on somebody else, and hopes he will be viewed simply as another bystander.
ReplyDelete"The Monsters are Due on Maple Street" criticizes human nature because it depicts the causes and effects of hysteria and how humans tend to trust false accusations in a state of confusion.
ReplyDeleteA single threat in "The Monsters Are Due on Maple Street" exposes both the perils and pitfalls, not just of American society, but of or very human nature. Causing the small community of Maple Street to fall into complete and utter chaos.
ReplyDeleteCheesemonger: Like the idea of people in a crowd needing a "scapegoat." Be sure to explain why this is necessary, and how we could avoid such a situation.
ReplyDeleteZoe: good start. The sentence could be improved by changing some of the words to make it less vague.
ReplyDeleteZoe: Like the ideas but rearrange the sentence to make it less of a run on sentence and more clear
ReplyDeleteBlue77: I really like it, but maybe say what specifically makes them less confident or intimidated by the crowd.
ReplyDeleteZoe: Could be clearer. You're shoving multiple ideas in one sentence. Calm down. You could improve your thesis with something like, "Rather than trusting their own thoughts, a person in a crowd is very likely to shift their trust to another's idea."
ReplyDeleteAs displayed from the Twilight Zone episode "The Monsters are Due on Maple Street", being in a crowd changes the way humans in the crowd will ultimately judge others; anyone with the slightest difference from the crowd will be judged quickly.
ReplyDeleteWhen a mystery arises, the suspicions and intolerance among a crowd of people may easily cause a chaos or even a calamity.
ReplyDeleteEndt1996- possibly reword the last part (...do or say...)but overall good point
ReplyDeleteZoe: maybe "crowd, they", also, "their own opinion, they", lastly, the end of your thesis is very unclear and difficult to understand, maybe you could try "they are more concerned with others' opinions".
ReplyDelete"The Monsters Are Due on Maple Street" criticizes human beings by showing their nature to act on impulse and demonstrating their tendency to quickly judge and come to conclusions.
ReplyDeletedv8now: Interesting wording, but perhaps you should describe how the community is "disembodied."
ReplyDeleteWhen the residents of Maple Street adjust their behavior in a crowd, it suggest that people change behaviors to be fit in and follow the attitude of others.
ReplyDeleteLittleWayne - I have to disagree with your thesis statement completely because the people of Maple Street never reunited. You should also change "blame" to a different word.
ReplyDeleteSoilentGreen: Like the ideas but its a little bit of a run-on. Maybe make it two sentences. Also try to refine the ideas.
ReplyDeleteofficaspectacula: The thesis sounds nice but the issue is that you explain prompt A but you don't exactly answer it. Or I'm just missing the point that you are trying to prove.
ReplyDelete@Mr.Bloggins, I think you need one or two more examples because it's hard to prove that the individuals in the TV show represent the whole human population and thus human nature.
ReplyDeleteCheesemonger, LittleWayne: Don't forget to include a positive along with your suggestions.
ReplyDelete@CheeseMonger, I believe you have misunderstood my thesis, perhaps reread it? The reunited aspect of it refers to the majority of the neighbors "ganging up" or finding common ground in blaming another neighbor. For example in the Twilight Zone episode, the majority of the neighbors are united against the neighbor they feel is a potential "fake" human.
ReplyDeleteMr.Bloggins: Good ideas, try not to start a thesis with the title of the movie though, and do not use because in a thesis
ReplyDeleteljackson789: A good start, but go deeper. How do people change - why don't they think for themselves? Explore a bit more; use apostrophe.
ReplyDeletefoodcraver: Good beginning, but just not sure if you feel the show observes human, or American, behavior. How do they "concede," and what effect does it have?
Display Name: Good ideas but a bit vague and overreaching. Focus on a sharper idea, and support with examples. C/S; WW.
w: How does that "single threat" escalate, and why? Explain a bit more. Frag.
runningkeys: Good start, but explain how they will be judged. What are the ramifications of being "judged quickly"? What does this say about nonconformity? Rep.
onlyhae9: I like this - it has some good possibility. Perhaps explaining how suspicion leads to intolerance, or vice versa, would be a good way to go.
Grace: Well and clearly written thesis could benefit from some sort of distinction between acting on impulse and quickly judging. Is this a mob mentality thing, or is there some other specific situation that creates this tendency?
ReplyDeletenc13: It sounds as if you're addressing conformity in your prompt. Perhaps you could go a bit deeper; why do people "adjust their behavior"? Is it human nature? How? Why? Proofread.